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Aaliya's avatar

Wow this is intense. Your descriptions of the rain, the lightning, and the atmosphere are so vivid that I could practically feel the chill.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you so much Aaliya! I’m so surprise that you would venture into psychology thriller. I heard you have a bad day with health so I’ll pray for your recovery.

Aaliya's avatar

Thank you so much, yes I was feeling under the weather, appreciate your concern bless you

Nick Hills's avatar

Here you start of right away!

"Only pain makes you remember. Only fear makes you thrive."

Great chapter, mate!

xtrole's avatar

Very tragic and terrifying chapter! 💔

And I suspect that Elise is going to end up at some point finding out about the lie, though under the circumstances she might not be upset that she was lied to. ⚖️

Hai Dang's avatar

Your words bring joy to my eyes. This novella is special in someway I can't spoil. Hope you will find it even more entertaining in the chapters to come.

Avgardella's avatar

Good opening line: “It’s funny that cold metal can leave a burning sensation even when you just reimagine it.”

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you 🙏

Zuza Kos ⚫️ The Quiet Darkness's avatar

Hai, when I read this, I feel like I'm right there! You have such a great way of describing places and capturing the atmosphere of the moment 🖤🖤🖤

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you, Zuza! I credit the real weather for that <33

Colleen Bent's avatar

Gosh! Such adjective use to paint pictures and feelings....

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you! 🙏

AËLA's avatar

"Only pain makes you remember.

Only fear makes you thrive."

That voice stays

long after the person who said it

is gone.

Not because it was kind.

Because it was true enough

to build a survival system on.

The most dangerous education

is the one that works.

Harry did not lie to Elise

because he is dishonest.

He lied because the truth

requires a context

she does not have yet.

And giving someone the truth

without the context

is just a different kind of weapon.

"This woman bleeds for me.

No one has ever bled for me."

That line is the whole chapter.

Everything before it

is the explanation

of why it hits so hard.

I will be here for chapter 5.

— AËLA

Hai Dang's avatar

Thanks AELA, you are very on brand 👍

Juliet posts as Jule's avatar

Remarkably vivid imagery which hits all the senses. Well done.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thanks Jule. This chapter is rather short ^^