Thoughtful and clear, descriptive writing. I could just imagine standing in the room and feeling the pain. Thank you for the opportunity to enjoy your writing.
Thank you for your kind words!!! There's a section in the middle when he reminiscent to his pass, where I switch from present tense to past tense. I'm not sure if it's the right way ^^
Have just had another read and to me the middle section sounds as though you are correct to put that in the past tense. Sometimes I’ve seen where writers put those diversions in italics. But to me the big thing is that it sounds just right.and makes sense So saying, some folk have criticised my writing as I’m not a good rule follower…that’s why I call myself a storyteller
Beautiful dialogue, you are doing a great work, mate!
“So I guess you dress like that to hide your scars.”
I love this line!
Thank you Nick! I wonder if this chapter makes the mind chess going. I haven’t revise this much so I’m still a bit nervous.
So good I got lost in the cat and mouse game this person is playing!
Thoughtful and clear, descriptive writing. I could just imagine standing in the room and feeling the pain. Thank you for the opportunity to enjoy your writing.
Thank you for your kind words!!! There's a section in the middle when he reminiscent to his pass, where I switch from present tense to past tense. I'm not sure if it's the right way ^^
Have just had another read and to me the middle section sounds as though you are correct to put that in the past tense. Sometimes I’ve seen where writers put those diversions in italics. But to me the big thing is that it sounds just right.and makes sense So saying, some folk have criticised my writing as I’m not a good rule follower…that’s why I call myself a storyteller
Yes! fellow storyteller! I mean it might sound weird if those are in italic for it would mean direct thoughts.
Yep…. Leave as is…