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Juliet posts as Jule's avatar

From my other side ….Julewrites4change. Awesome writing….well done…I felt I was right there..keep up your enthusiasm….

Hai Dang's avatar

Aw, thank you so much… I see your other channel now. I haven’t read today so I’ll go with yours ^^

James Winter's avatar

That pothole line got me. You have a very nice style of writing and are very talented. Keep up the good work.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you James. Bumpy road is universal rage ^^

Nick Hills's avatar

"It wasn’t a question. It was the beginning of" dance is getting more and more interesting, I love it!

Hai Dang's avatar

Next chapter would make or break the book 😆

Nick Hills's avatar

Ahahah can’t wait to read it 😁

Aaliya's avatar

Truly this is so chilling and intense. The detail about the pothole being a “personal betrayal” really stuck with me. Such a small moment, but it perfectly captured the narrator’s mindset.

I love how the city itself feels like a character here. The contrast between the modern glass skyline and the gritty canal life is so vivid.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you Aaliya. You are too kind.