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Alicia's avatar

The cadence is fun and catchy and the end is satisfying. 😈

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you!!!

TheGrimoireVault's avatar

Gave me a dark little smile at the end :)

Hai Dang's avatar

Lol. Thank you!

Nick Hills's avatar

I loved it, great end! Courage and intelligence don't often go together!

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you, Nick. I'm learning that the community really love bad ending. 🖤 🖤 🖤

Sam Oldman's avatar

Nice, dark and witty. That stupid knight!

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you so much for reading and have a nice day, Sam!

AËLA's avatar

"Stupid knight,"

she smears,

smiling ear to ear.

The demon was never

the one to fear.

He brought holy light,

morning prayers,

and a heart beating in rhythm

with what he thought

was her distress.

He was wrong

about what he was saving her from.

He was wrong

about who needed saving.

The poem earns its smile

because the knight

never questioned

whose story he was in.

— AËLA

Hai Dang's avatar

<33 Awesome comment as usual, AELA. Thanks for seeing behind the mirror!

The Galactic Writer's avatar

Dark is beautiful! That was fun. Loved the cadence.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you so much, The Galactic Writer!!! I did follow iambic pentameter this time. I'm so thrill that you approved. 😁

Arkenwell's avatar

Love it! Darkness with a twist!

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you! <3

Aaliya's avatar

This was one of your best.Wow

Hai Dang's avatar

Really? Thank you so much. I didn't know my comedy could get some love... 💜 🙏 ❤️

Fragments and the Dark's avatar

This was really cool! Loved it! 🥰👍🏻

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you so much! <3

Siobhan Gallagher's avatar

Haha, love it! This reminds me so much of this:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=poKI_MY0Bkw

Hai Dang's avatar

Urg! What a twist of fate at 74—unsheathed her claws. Love the song. How they make the English line sound good in the song is beyond my understanding, though. The one with the Knigh in shining armor lol

Siobhan Gallagher's avatar

Yeah, they dis a great job mixing the Japanese and English. Well composed, I assume, haha. Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Tales From Sphyra's avatar

Like Grim, I smiled too darkly at the end of this. 🙃

Well done!! I love an Italian Sonnet. And all over a really cool painting. I’m constantly impressed by your imagination, my friend. ❤️

Hai Dang's avatar

That’s 2/3 comments love the “no good deed”, seems like the dark corner is really dark lol.