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TheGrimoireVault's avatar

This made me want to cry.

Hai Dang's avatar

Which part? I’m particularly emotional at: “They followed each other, the honeymoon bliss.”

TheGrimoireVault's avatar

Ten hours at a desk, two hours in the crawl,

I come home to a shadow staring at the wall.

Our beautiful baby—is learning how to pray

To a silent ledger, to a house that smells of rust!

We brought a soul into this magic kingdom

just to watch it turn to dust

_____________

Hits on a big reason why I don't want kids

Hai Dang's avatar

This part is where I doubt myself the most since It's "her" version. I'm like... not sure I could write that part. I'm sorry that it hits... but kids could be the best motivator in the world. My millenial friend just gave birth to her baby girl. 🤩

TheGrimoireVault's avatar

I decided a while ago I didn’t want kids. I don’t want to bring a child into the world if i get to decide. Especially not if I can’t offer them a life that’s better than what I have. Currently watching my nieces suffer the consequences of their moms choices and trying to be there for them as much as I can be. There is nothing worse than watching innocent kids suffer the sins of their parents.

Hai Dang's avatar

It is, it is. The world has the weirdest contradiction... And things are getting worse with increasing subscription services. I guess you could use a vacation in the Manor 😆

I heard they say 1 day in a new environment to refresh could work. As for me, a guy, I always try to find a funnt edge to things just to entertain myself in the gloom.

Nick Hills's avatar

I love your medieval personality! Great work mate! Have a beautiful day!

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you and have a great weekend ahead, Nick.

AËLA's avatar

"Ruined not by malice,

poison, or rage.

Media wrote the script,

and we act on the stage."

Nobody betrayed anyone

on purpose.

They just followed

a script

that promised

the whole kingdom

and never mentioned

the rent.

The ring split

along the seam

where the design

forgot

to include

the actual weight

of living.

— AËLA

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you for reading, AELA. 🖤 🙏

Just Judy's avatar

This is super Hai. Here I thought I no longer liked poetry and yet I was capitivated through every stanza. It didn't make me want to cry. It made my soul feel as though it were listening to a grand opera. Bless you, girl.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you so much, Judy. It’s a blessing to have you read and feel like that because I wrote it in that sense. Left - Right, two sides telling their story. 🙏

Just Judy's avatar

I noticed the left / right and understood. It was definitely enjoyable.

Juliet posts as Jule's avatar

This is such a heartfelt description of the modern day experience of many. So thoughtfully organised. Awesome writing thanks Hai.

Hai Dang's avatar

Thank you, Jule. 🙏 I hope the other 50% get the better side of the Cruel Pact… I mean they shall never be fractured, always on the mending between both parties. I also hope the rate will increase with mending instead of cutting relationship these days. Spread love and support!

Beneath the Wolfmoon's avatar

Heartachingly beautiful

Kostia Dmytriiev's avatar

Great poem!

Hai Dang's avatar

This is the first time you said that 😱Thank you so much Kos.

Kostia Dmytriiev's avatar

It makes me feel bad that your reply is longer than my comment. Now I have to write longer comment than your comment to make myself feel better.